Difference between good and bad cover letter
Difference between good and bad cover letter
You look at these two curriculum vitas below and judge for yourself which would have had time to read if you happened to be the recruiter. Considering some things which include the fact that there are close to two hundred (200) or more applications on your table each of these applications are accompanied by both Curriculum vitae and cover letters.
Two of the most important things in all the letters that you have noticed are; the simple and easy to understand words used in application letters, second the right words used. Those words truly are made to represent a career field.
What you need to do is to keep your English simple and try to use good sentences with right punctuation in your letters. Look at these two last job application letters and score based on simplicity of the words used and clarity.
17 Agric Road, Lekki
APPLICATION FOR THE POSITION OF LAWYER RELATIONS OFFICER IN YOUR ORGANISATION
I am writing to humbly apply for the position of Lawyer relations officer in your organization.
I met the requirement of minimum years of post call experience and resident in Lagos. I am disciplined, result oriented and possessing the skills required for effective manning of the position of Lawyer relations officer in your company
I have the following skills: Interpersonal skill, problem solving skill, Microsoft Words, Communication, Writing, Research, Wardress Development, Management, Administrative and I have the confidence that I will perform optimally for the growth of your company.
Dear Hiring Manager,
APPLICATION FOR THE POST OF FINANCIAL MANAGER
As a result-oriented chartered accountant with in-depth knowledge on the need for a financial management professional to make accurate and effective business decisions, I wish to apply for the position of a Financial Manager in order to drive your organizational goals and objectives.
As a Chartered Accountant with over 4 years of industry experience, I have been initiating accounting processes that promote fraud-free transactions, implementing financial policies and supervising all financial accounting operations. In addition to that, I am adept at developing financial strategies that stimulate excellent financial analysis, and deploying accounting software for top-notch effectiveness. I have included my career achievements below:
- Eliminated a potential tax liability of $200 million
- Generated over N1 billion per year in revenue
- Financially managed and supervised construction projects to the tune of $250,000.000
One of the effective ways I have increased client loyalty is by developing positive relationships with all stakeholders, creating excellent communication channels, and proactively initiating creative solutions to new challenges. I am also a great team player and inventive leader.
Like every company, the Dell Accounting Agency thrives because of her healthy talent-base. In view of that, I look forward to joining your team of professionals. I have included my contact information below for further discussion.
What would your judgment be, and be very frank about it. In the second CV the job seeker listed all he has done all through his career life that he has been initiating accounting processes that promote fraud-free transactions, implementing financial policies and supervising all financial accounting operations. In addition to that, he has am adept at developing financial strategies that stimulate excellent financial analysis, and deploying accounting software for top-notch effectiveness.
He also listed his achievements stating that he included my career achievements below:
Eliminated a potential tax liability of $200 million
Generated over N1 billion per year in revenue
Financially managed and supervised construction projects to the tune of $250,000.000.
In the cover letter the job seeker also sated he solves problems an all that and many more other things in the cover letter.
While the first cover letter was just really brief with little information and nothing can we really say about the first cover letter but if the second job seeker sent a CV together with his cover letter what then is the reason or the necessity of listing all that he listed in his cover. Cover letter is supposed to be very brief and straight to point contained in a single page of 4A paper.
Make your cover letter simple to read, make it very brief yet containing relevant information that the recruiter may use to judge your application and decide if you are a better candidate for a job